Jim in Anchorage Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 Would you write this ad differently? Is their something I wrote that gives you a what the hell does he mean moment? You have the facts tell me how you would write the ad.http://anchorage.craigslist.org/apa/3867921924.html
Fezmid Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 "or just sunning on a chair." -- Umm, I thought this was in Alaska? "850 SD/850 rent Available 7/1/2012" -- First, I assume that should be 2013? But what's "850 SD?" "woods up the dead end road.." -- Maybe it's just me, but I read that to mean that there's dead people in the woods at first. There's some typographical errors too - not sure if those matter on Craigslist.
BringBackFergy Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 "or just sunning on a chair." -- Umm, I thought this was in Alaska? "850 SD/850 rent Available 7/1/2012" -- First, I assume that should be 2013? But what's "850 SD?" "woods up the dead end road.." -- Maybe it's just me, but I read that to mean that there's dead people in the woods at first. There's some typographical errors too - not sure if those matter on Craigslist. $850 Security Deposit or possibly $850 in sand dollars
DC Tom Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 "Your," not "you're." I didn't even bother going past that.
The Poojer Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 (edited) I wouldn't use '600 sq feet' and 'Large kitchen/dining area. Large bathroom' in the same breath....nothing about 600 sq ft screams large anything.... Edited June 13, 2013 by The Poojer
Jim in Anchorage Posted June 13, 2013 Author Posted June 13, 2013 Oh crap I edited it to 2013 That's why I posted here I thought something was wrong, Yes SD is Security deposit.
Gugny Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 Might I suggest the following edit ... Very pet friendly environment with it's own yard , no traffic, the school playground just across the street (sorry, this disqualifies you, Beerball) and woods up the dead end road..
BringBackFergy Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 (edited) Might I suggest the following edit ... Very pet friendly environment with it's own yard , no traffic, the school playground just across the street (sorry, this disqualifies you, Beerball) and woods up the dead end road.. its...rather than "it is" Edited June 13, 2013 by BringBackFergy
Best Player Available Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 I would add, "Hot water 365 days a year with a new boiler installed up to code for your added comfort." Also, "watch, photograph, brown bears, learn to eat human food, in a neighbors dumpster.But, Beware illegal parked vehicles are towed."
Jim in Anchorage Posted June 13, 2013 Author Posted June 13, 2013 Alright that's enough. I ain't renting to you guys anyway. Frankly I don't care for your looks.
Guffalo Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 That's right you're (your) own washer/dryer in unit! No more trips to the Laundromat or coin slots. . Large kitchen/dining area. Large bathroom with new cabinets and lots of storage space. Located in a 4 unit building on a very quiet dead end road just across the street from Muldoon elementary playground. (Starting to get creepy) Very pet friendly environment with it's own yard , no traffic, the school playground just across the street and woods up the dead end road..(Hide the bodies here) Plenty of room for fido to roam in[or you].(or your dead bodies) Yes a yard see grass when you step out the door, not asphalt. Lots of room in back for barbecues, parking atv's or just sunning on a chair. (Sunning on a chair watching an ATV parking lot?) Owner [me] lives on site. Quick repairs done. (Can you get blood out of carpets) 850 SD/850 rent Available 7/1/2012, showing now. 30 day lease. Call Jim @ 677-8653 any time. No messages please, just call me back. 8620 Kluane.
DC Tom Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 You forgot "Free truck in parking lot. Brown Bears optional. Beware of boiler."
The Poojer Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 also add, no jethro tull, led zepplin or rush music allowed as they are all highly overrated
Philly McButterpants Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 also add, no jethro tull, led zepplin or rush music allowed as they are all highly overrated :lol: Meow Woof!
Jim in Anchorage Posted June 13, 2013 Author Posted June 13, 2013 First call I get is from some hot sounding babe. "when can I look at it?" Me [leering at the phone] "anytime at all." "Great I'll be over with my fiance in a hour."
Jim in Anchorage Posted June 13, 2013 Author Posted June 13, 2013 You forgot "Free truck in parking lot. Brown Bears optional. Beware of boiler." You can't write a ad."Warm and toasty apt, with option to buy F250.. Wildlife viewing abounds."
PromoTheRobot Posted June 13, 2013 Posted June 13, 2013 Just google mapped the address. It's right on the edge of the woods. Nice. My place is next to the woods. Get lots of critters 'n varmints. PTR
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