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Im writing a screenplay for a screenwriting class im taking and its for a short film 10-15minutes long. The premise is that theres a greedy businessman that wants a Ralph Wilson-like owner to sell his small market team so the businessman can move it to a bigger market. The team owner turns down the offer and will be getting on a plane later that day to sign a lease extension with the city that will keep them there. The businessman knows that the owner has a bad heart and is in failing health so he gets 2 of his goons to try to literally scare the owner to death instead of outright killing him. What Im looking for is 3 different ways that the goons try to induce a heart attack on the owner. Any and all serious input will be appreciated.

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Im writing a screenplay for a screenwriting class im taking and its for a short film 10-15minutes long. The premise is that theres a greedy businessman that wants a Ralph Wilson-like owner to sell his small market team so the businessman can move it to a bigger market. The team owner turns down the offer and will be getting on a plane later that day to sign a lease extension with the city that will keep them there. The businessman knows that the owner has a bad heart and is in failing health so he gets 2 of his goons to try to literally scare the owner to death instead of outright killing him. What Im looking for is 3 different ways that the goons try to induce a heart attack on the owner. Any and all serious input will be appreciated.

You would have to set this up with flashbacks to the owners deceased mother and how she always said he was a accident and why can't he be more like his older brother. The goons do a Hollywood quality makeup job and remake some one as a exact twin of his mother, right down to her favorite dress and the mole on her chin. When he gets out of the car at the airport, his "mom" runs up and screams "See Ralph, I always said you where a bad boy. A bad, bad boy" Some worms coming out of her mouth would add to the effect,if your budget allows.

How do the Goons know all these details? I dunno you're the screenwriter

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Or you could go for the M Night Shumalumalumalumalumalumaluman style and have the old owner realize...he's already dead :blush:

 

He actually died 20 years ago when he had a heart attack from the joy of watching Norwoods kick sail thru the uprights in Super Bowl XXV and has since been in purgatory

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or they could crashland on a mysterious island with polar bears and fog monsters and wander, aimless, and plotless for 6 years and be declared legally dead.

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Maybe a nice sex scene and he dies while banging a hooker.

 

Hmm...could show he has an evil side to him and loves hookers, the new buyer blackmails him. He goes deeper into the sex scene and dies after a drug cocktail?

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The owner meets his family for dinner at a diner.

He sits in the middle of the restaurant and watches people come and go. There's a bell everytime the door opens.

First his wife shows up

Then his son shows up and some suspicious looking guy in a Members Only jacket shows up at the same time

His daughter is trying to parallel park

 

The suspicious man gets up and heads toward the bathroom and the film cuts to black in mid scene

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Or you could go for the M Night Shumalumalumalumalumalumaluman style and have the old owner realize...he's already dead :blush:

 

He actually died 20 years ago when he had a heart attack from the joy of watching Norwoods kick sail thru the uprights in Super Bowl XXV and has since been in purgatory

 

I like this.

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